This week My Class and I have been writing a story about a Yellow Umbrella here is My Story about the Yellow Umbrella. This story is Empathy.
Umbrella
Early one stormy morning,
The door to Miss Elem’s Home For Children opened
wide.
The girl with the bright sunflower yellow umbrella,
cautiously entered the olphonge before finding
a home for her umbrella. Not Wanting to be seen.
Baris Quickly whipped his head
around the door frame so that he was Hidden from view.
Stanning off to the slide, the girl observed the
joyful scene
as children searched in the box for hidden treasures.
The Girl smiled as she watched the young boy racing
around
the room like a rocket. Her smile quickly faded as she
looked
back at the umbrella stand and all she saw were
puddles.
Her beloved umbrella had suddenly disappeared.
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Ki ora Ellenor,
ReplyDeleteWhat an intriguing story. You have included some really good descriptive words, that help me make a picture in my head about the scene you watched. I can tell that the day is not the nicest day, and the girl must have a very yellow umbrella. Who do you think stole the umbrella?
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ReplyDeleteHi Ellenor,
ReplyDeleteThis was such a good video to watch and write about. You have used some great adjectives and adverbs in your writing. Just be careful that you don't have capital letters in the middle of your sentences.
You have used some great language features to enhance your writing, well done!
Mrs Bryce
Thanks Mrs Bryce
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